Wanderlust Snippet: Fiona Scott
Howdy, y'all! There has been changes to Wanderlust. I started out with two POVs as an experiment, and for me the experiment failed. It is so hard to write two POVs in my opinion (y'all are amazing who do it!!!!!!!!!!!!), especially when every time it came around for me to write about Cody, I didn't want to because Fiona's story is so much more interesting. So, Cody is no longer an MC. He's still part of the story, but I am not writing from his POV. I was frustrated because cutting Cody's chapters out of the book cut it town from 12 chapters to 6, and over 20,000 words to 15,311. But that's okay! I think it's a good thing because the book was a little slow.
Ready for Fiona's snippet?? Let's goooooooooo!
Ready for Fiona's snippet?? Let's goooooooooo!
~Fiona scowled at the thought of Cody. At first, his good looks―thick blonde curls that skated
over his forehead, fiery hazel eyes, and a muscular, athletic body―had caused her stomach to
flutter, but as the evening wore on, she realized the teenager was pathetic, snappish, quiet,
moody, and, above all, mysterious. A lingering pain wallowed in his eyes, along with a dwelling
anger, and his face―after the delightful grin when they first met―had descended into a
clouded and scornful expression.
over his forehead, fiery hazel eyes, and a muscular, athletic body―had caused her stomach to
flutter, but as the evening wore on, she realized the teenager was pathetic, snappish, quiet,
moody, and, above all, mysterious. A lingering pain wallowed in his eyes, along with a dwelling
anger, and his face―after the delightful grin when they first met―had descended into a
clouded and scornful expression.
I want to get to know him better, but only because he seems to be hurting. And, he’s mysterious.
Fiona rolled onto her back, dropping Rooftoppers, and stared at the ceiling. The mystery of
Cody Howard intrigued her.
Fiona rolled onto her back, dropping Rooftoppers, and stared at the ceiling. The mystery of
Cody Howard intrigued her.
How did his father die? Why did he suddenly shut down when I asked him if he followed horse
racing? What does he hold against it? Why doesn’t he talk about Mr. Howard? So many
questions surfaced.
racing? What does he hold against it? Why doesn’t he talk about Mr. Howard? So many
questions surfaced.
She turned Cody Howard over in her brain throughout dinner while staring at her alien-shaped
reflection in the spaghetti pot. Her thoughts meandered to the possibilities of why Cody might
resent horses.
reflection in the spaghetti pot. Her thoughts meandered to the possibilities of why Cody might
resent horses.
Suddenly, someone poked her in the arm. Fiona yelped and jumped. Her hand followed her startle and
flew up without being asked to. The fork clutched in her fingers spun off by the momentum of her arm's
toss. The whirling fork narrowly missed Brooklynn’s head. Alfredo sauce and noodles twirled
everywhere, splattering the tablecloth and Sydney’s face, and the fork plunged into the unyielding abyss of
the kitchen.
All clinks of silverware ceased. Eyes flew to Fiona’s startled face. Mom paused in scooping
peas and stared at her, wide-eyed. “Wow. What was that about?”
peas and stared at her, wide-eyed. “Wow. What was that about?”
Fiona sighed. She shoved her chair away from the dining table and crossed the area between
the table and the kitchen to grope around for the fork. It seemed to have vanished into thin air.
She thrust her fingers under the cabinets and oven, pressed her cheek up against the floor to
peer under the refrigerator, and even went so far as to peek into the drain of the sink. When no
fork turned up, she chose a fresh one from the drawer and returned to her seat.
Mom still regarded her with raised eyebrows and pressed lips. The look silently demanded the table and the kitchen to grope around for the fork. It seemed to have vanished into thin air.
She thrust her fingers under the cabinets and oven, pressed her cheek up against the floor to
peer under the refrigerator, and even went so far as to peek into the drain of the sink. When no
fork turned up, she chose a fresh one from the drawer and returned to her seat.
an explanation for the flinging of the raptured fork.~
Stay tuned for a new blog story on Wednesday!
-Izzy-
-Izzy-
Ahhhh, soooooo good! Your writing style, m'friend, is nothing short of awesome. *hugs*
ReplyDeleteI want more!!! <3333
Thank you soooooo much, Ellie!!!!!!!!!!!! *hugs*<333
DeleteWow, I LOVE how you write! You have a real talent with words; the snippet was really enjoyable and made me wanted to read the rest of the book! Is Rooftoppers a book? We have it at our library; I've looked at it before.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much for sharing! Can't wait to read more!
~ Jemima
Thank you so much, Jemima! Rooftoppers is a book, and is equally (or exceedingly) my favorite next to The Running Dream. I hope to do a book review on it soon!
DeleteAww, no worries! BTW, my longest novel so far has 4 POVs so far... I don't find it too hard and it satisfies the greed within for ALWAYS MORE CHARACTERS... *mwah ha ha ha ha* XD
Delete~ Jemima | theseekingbook.blogspot.com
Wow! *applauds* That's impressive!
DeleteYAY!!!! I'm so glad that I finally got to read your snippet. I was not AT ALL disappointed with this snippet! You have a beautiful writing style and I was hooked all the way through!!!
ReplyDeleteAnd yes, how do people do two points of view?? I'm used to reading and writing only one point of view. I guess the only way to learn how to write multiple POVs is by reading lots of books with multiple POVs. :D :P
I'm looking forward to more snippets!
~Gracie Hammond~
Thank you so much, Gracie! :D :D
DeleteAnd by the way, Izzy, I LOVE the title 'Wanderlust'. I didn't even know what it meant when you first announced your novel, but I was so intrigued!
DeleteI'm horrible at finding titles for my stories; maybe I could ask for your help ππππ
~Gracie Hammond~
Thank you, I'm so glad!
DeleteThere are many different ways to title a story. Sometimes when I write, I wait to finish the story before titling. Other times, the title comes from me even before the book begins (like "Wanderlust") And when neither of these happen and I'm stuck with brainstorming a title, I think of what the book will be about or the main character's name or the situation of the ending (like, in "Hero's Victory" I based the name off the situation of what happens to the horse at the end), or you could also name a book of the genre or where it is set. Also, there are book generators online! *winks* Hope that helps!
Yes, this is helpful! I'll definitely take your ideas! I'm working on a book, and the only reason it has a title is because of my creative mother ππ I reckon the only time I actually am able to think up a story is when I've finished the book (which almost never happensπππ), like you said. And I guess I get to impatient to wait till the book is done and I want the title NOW! *shakes head*
DeleteBut I'm thankful for the help! Now I just gotta put it to the test....
~Gracie~
Awesome! Good luck! *high fives*
DeleteThanks! *high fives you back--from six feet away* ππππ
Delete~Gracie~
LOL!
DeleteAwww, why didn't you give us more? It was SOOO good!! Do you think you might do another snippet?
ReplyDelete~Elate
Thank you, thank you! I do think I'll do another snippet. Absolutely!
DeleteI love reading your writing! I really think you should publish your writing someday! It's easier to write in different POVs if there are two people writing :)
ReplyDeleteThank you, Annika! It IS much easier to write two POVs with a co-author.
DeleteWow this was AMAZING! Your style of writing, like always, is amazing and I can really capture what's happening with the way you word things! Great Job!!! Can't wait to read more! :D
ReplyDeleteThank you so much, Brooklyn!
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